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Listen or turn away..

by Amalieaa


Listen or turn away…

Silence is golden; I knew of no-one who’d try to engage or talk to me. "Do you ever feel like people pass through you as if you're an embodiment of air? 'Human,' yes, but you can't be seen or touched. You're just a surface, flesh without purpose."You could position yourself in the midst of a bustling town; right where cars glide across a surface, slowly trudging forward one full turn of the wheel at a time no one would notice you. They'd keep piercing through your scars (things that are slowly decaying you away, aging you every second, with every breath taken) tiring them, piece by piece Slowly… Until you fell apart-nothing was left of you, not even a memory. My scars mark me as a person, branded onto my surface it seems: at first sight people can tell something is wrong- something wrong with me. I'm no human, I have no shape, my surface doesn't do as it's supposed to do, all that I can do is listen.

I’m a disease; the sort of thing that makes someone have the urge to cover their mouth, as if I give off such a bad feeling that it diffused swiftly like a bad smell. I can make people shed tears of not joy from seeing me, but sorrowfulness that I can never fully understand. Why do people feel sorry for me? Some have hurt themselves because of me, if only my voice worked.

Under my bed; that's where I go to hide. Carefully, I place my fragile pile of flesh under the bed- I'm safe here. No one loves me, not even the night sky, the only one I can talk to. But I can't speak. The moon is the only thing that seems to understand me, but he doesn't always listen. There are times where my world is full of music- it thrives with color and musical notes of gaiety, the calling of the birds- I hear them call out my name. There's another world where I can hear all words: if that's coming from the mouths of humans or even animals, every organism has their own language, I've heard it. This world is beautiful but also like a needle to the throat. Every sound is piercing, one blade at a time, one limb, and soon I'm nothing. I may be jealous of not being able to speak but I don't know, all I know is that the world can kill me easily. My last world is my world. It's silent, just me and my thoughts. I can't hear anybody or anything. I’m most at peace here.

My scars aren't what makes me me. I can listen or choose to turn away, I can close my ears and make all sounds dissipate into the thin air. Silence is what makes me me…



this is my short story of a girl’s  inner thoughts and feelings when she feels alone and worthless.


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Hey! I just wanna give a quick review
Firstly, before anything, I'd like to say this was a very good piece writing.
You really expressed yourself through this writing
and I liked the beginning. It really caught my attention.
The way you describe using words that would not often be used is really amazing. Being alone really makes one feel alone and sometimes worthless, and you really did justice to explaining the character's state of mind.
I really must point out that I loved the final statement. It really gave was really soulful.
The whole piece was beautiful. This was a very good writing.




Amalieaa says...


I did not expect this much love for my piece I wrote it years ago and thought I would post it here Thankyou so much for your lovey words!



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hey there, thought I'd leave a quick review of this piece.

I found this piece pretty moving. The mood and the visuals that are created through your choice of language are effective in showing the reader how the narrator feels.

One thing I would say about this piece is that the punctuation is a little distracting. You correctly use semicolons in places, but then there are places where sentences run on, there are multiple punctuation marks right next to each other, or the punctuation marks are surrounded by excess spaces.

I think it's most prevalent in the first paragraph. The second sentence asks the reader a question, and then continues the sentence: "Do you ever feel like people pass through you?, as if you're an embodiment of air 'human' yes, but you can't be seen or touched." I think that with better punctuation, this part of the story would be more effective. The way I think it's meant to be read is like this:

"Do you ever feel like people pass through you as if you're an embodiment of air? 'Human,' yes, but you can't be seen or touched. You're just a surface, flesh without purpose."

Also, I don't think you need the hyphen in 'no one.'

But again, overall I really liked this piece. I think that the part that was most moving to me was where you wrote, "I'm a disease; the sort of thing that makes someone have the urge to cover their mouth." I just absolutely loved the way you put that. Lowkey gives off "Edward Cullen meets Bella Swan" vibes and I'm always looking for a reason to reference "Twilight."




Amalieaa says...


Sometimes I do struggle with punctuation and it does annoy me thanks for pointing everything out there it%u2019s difficult sometimes I%u2019m not dyslexic I just struggle with punctuation from time to time :)



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“Silence is golden; I knew of no-one who’d try to engage or talk to me. Do you ever feel like people pass through you?” I felt this on another level. I feel like people don’t hear what I have to say. I love how you’re talking into your thoughts.

“My scars aren't what makes me me. I can listen or choose to turn away, I can close my ears and make all sounds dissipate into the thin air. Silence is what makes me me…”

PREECH! I loved reading this! Keep writing! Don’t stop sharing your thoughts.




Amalieaa says...


Thank you again!! It makes me feel so happy you loved it!



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This is a story about a girl who feels alone and like no one loves her. She is not able to speak and for that, other people feel sorry for her. But the girl does not want them to pity her because of her silence. The silence is just a part of who she is and no one understands that.

My favorite part of this story is the ending, where it says

My scars aren't what makes me me. I can listen or choose to turn away, I can close my ears and make all sounds dissipate into the thin air. Silence is what makes me me…


The girl is stating who she is. The scars she bears are not all of her. She does not have to listen to other people. Her silence is just part of what makes her, her.

I like how at the beginning she feels like her scars define her and all she can do is listen as other people speak, but then she goes through some growth at the end. That's when she realizes that she doesn't have to just listen.




Amalieaa says...


Hi can I add if anyone wants to check out another story of mine there%u2019s one on my Wattpad account you may like. My account is @Diligencexxx go follow up and read




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