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The Licorice Girl: On "Nothing"

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        It was a still, hot summer day and the air smelled of sand. The smell of scorching hot sand on a beach in the middle of July. A girl skipped quickly on her tiptoes as she passed over an asphault sidewalk. She flipped her two braids to one side of her neck as she hopped onto a sun-bleached orange swing. She winced as the back of her bare thighs met the hot, leathery material.

    "Ouch! Happens every time..." The girl pulled a long cord of red licorice out of her shirt pocket and stuck it in the corner of her mouth. She was chewing it slowly, methodically, when a young girl, about eleven, skipped up to the swing set.

      "Hey Byrdie, wanna play house over at Donna's?"

       "Nah." Byrdie, the girl on the swing, replied.

        "Well what are you doing?"

        "Nothing." She swung higher. 

The other girl walked away, tight ponytail bobbing. Byrdie started talking to herself, very quietly at first, but soon, anybody passing by would be able to hear her.

        "Nothin'. Nothin's a funny word ain't it. I said I wasn't doing nothin' but I was. I was, and still am, swinging on a swing and eating a red vine. No one wants to hear me say that to them though 'cause they can already see it. Even the word 'nothing' has got seven letters, so it's got something. And even if we wrote nothing on a page as a blank, in other words not write it, the paper would take place of the word, and I myself would read: 'Oh. Hi, nope. I'm doin' paper.' If I was writing it down of course, but what about a vacuum? Teacher says there's nothin' in a vacuum, but there is! Dust, dog hair, and paper clips. An occasional sock. And if I said I was talking about nothing it would be true, since I am talking 'bout nothing, just the somethin' nothin'. But if this is something-nothing, then what is nothing-nothing, and something-something?" 

The girl slowed the swing to a stop by dragging her bare feet in the dust. She swallowed the last of her licorice, and hopped over to some grass and began to walk home. A middle-aged woman walked out onto her patio.

            "Whatcha doing Byrdie?"

Byrdie swung her head over, braids flying, to look across the street. She began to speak-

            "Ah, na-" she stopped, eyebrows furrowed, and kept walking with a thoughtful look on her face.

  Ironic, how that day, everyone in that tiny town, was saying :

           "Byrdie's up to something."

©Altari

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Hey! I must say, I really loved this peace. It made me think a lot about the meaning of the things I say sometimes.
I shows that even a generic response like "Oh, nothing" can really hold a lot of meaning behind it in a sense.
I think it's pretty good except for maybe a few specification issues and grammatical errors.
Maybe try having someone proof read it and they could give you a bit of feed back on the things which they might think you need to clarify.

I say this because even though I read it and understood, not everyone has the same level of perception that most people on YWS has so things we may understand mght be confusing to others.
Anywho, I really did love this piece and I hope to see ore from you soon. Happy writing, Gabz<3

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Hi! I'm just writing this to say that this is not Article/Essay. I clicked that by accident when I published it. If anyone knows how I can change it to something like short story then please let me know. Thanks.

@Altari There is a long, white button on the right side of the screen (If you are on a computer) that says something like "Edit your work"

You can click that and then go down to click publish.

Idk

it might work.

Okay, I'll try that! Thank you!



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— Cicero