Published August 22, 2011
With blood hammering through my veins,
Thoughts pressing against my brain violently,
And irritated eyes,
I shiver in a corner of my room.
I finally cracked.
My sanity has finally been dismembered by the pain,
Though it's held on for so long.
You aren't meant to hold things in,
To hold things tight.
Hurting and screaming,
Crying and dying.
No one cares about the pain you feel.
Keep it to yourself,
But don't keep it in.
If you keep it in,
You will sing to the
Symphony of Insanity.
It's a smooth song, no doubt.
Flowing along side the tune of a crow.
Depression, hatred,
Pain.
The conducters are each of us,
Cutters and druggies.
Devil spawns created by broken homes.
Broken dreams.
We all at some point
Crack.
We all at some point
Hum the Symphony of Insanity.
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This is really, very good! I love the title, it's beautiful! When I looked at this piece from above I thought it seemed a bit choppy as the structure of stanzas and lines seemed irregular and all but when I read it, it actually flowed really well so no complaints there! You're a very creative writer and I love, love, love the imagery in this poem. I can't say much more than hey, this is great.
I can award you with 5/5 icky, sticky spiders too off course... and that I will, that I did... there, it's done!
Good Luck & Keep Writing
// Demoness
Well done! That was incredible! The title has a beautiful flow off the tongue and as when used in the poem. It brings forward the undiagnosed and unsolved issues that are mocked by society.
I love your order of events and stanza sizes were ideal. The imagery in the beginning was a dynamite way to start off the poem! I would love to read more of your stuff, you are really gifted!
WOOOOOWWW that was amazing. Your writing flow is fantastic! Usually when I see certain genres of poetry the writing seems so choppy, but this one flowed together smoothly and evenly. I couldn't find prominent bumps anywhere. I love your poetry writing style, it seems like you just sit there and let the words flow out freely without deliberating, like natural thought. Very good job, even though quite depressing :-p Maybe because it is so true. Anyway, great work!