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Hi Alfred!
Please say you took part in the Holiday Lyrics contest!
It goes without saying that I really liked this! I had to look up Carol of the Bells, because I didn't know the tune before, and I tried singing along with these lyrics to see how well they fitted.
This was absolutely hilarious.
I'm *so* glad to find that someone else does this as well - rewriting lyrics that already have a tune is one of the most fun things I know.
Overall, I have to say you did an amazing job! There were a few bits that didn't flow as smoothly as the others though.
I think it was mainly this section. I think the second and the fourth line have each one syllable more than the original version, so that's why they sound a bit forced. It would be amazing if you could come up with versions that had the same number of syllables! It's sad if one or two lines make an otherwise good song stumble.
This was really funny, although I'm not sure how to pronounce the sounds! But maybe it's for everyone to choose.
I also really liked how you left in some of the original words where they fit. That just makes it even funnier (or maybe I just say that because I like doing it as well)!
Loved this
Demeter
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Thanks for the accolades, Demi
I did include it in the contest, whatever verdict I'll get I'll accept. Happy New Year!
Awesomeness. I myself am obsessed with all things zombie (as are my friends) and I have to say this is awesome. No criticisms or complaints. I hope you don't mind if I print this and take it Christmas caroling next year with my friends...
Hey Alf!
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~ You missed the punctuation at the end of the first line I quoted.I'm here to return one of the many favors you've given me!
...though...I don't review many lyrics...so I'm not really sure how to go about it. One thing I do know is my initial reaction to this song...EWW!
This song is really...nasty...but at the same time it wasn't creepy, which is good. Most zombie things are creepy and nasty, but this wasn't all that creepy (of course, I haven't heard the tune that you've put it to...
Anyway, it was good. The only thing I saw was:
...alright, this wasn't nearly as helpful as your reviews are...but there it is.
Keep Writing!
~Shady
Thanks Shady