Hey Aley.
Unfortunately I am not that skilled in Iambic Pentameter to help you sort that out, but I can attempt to take this on general poetic merit.
I find myself puzzling over this. Puzzling isn't necessarily bad, mind you. There's something deep here, with the metaphor almost smothering it. Once I actually looked up what "nepenthe" meant the poem made a lot more sense (which is more an issue of my own vocabulary than anything).
One thing that bugged me was tongue/run, which is close enough to rhyme. I have a mild obsession with consistent rhyme so getting rid of that one should seriously help the flow.
My main thing here is that it looks rough at the beginning. It looks like you were struggling to get into the rhythm of the story. Near the end you weave a tale together and I can get into the story itself, without many breaks in what's going on. At the beginning it feels a little choppy, like you cut out pieces of information to have it all fit. But that could've been first read stiffness. I tend to not read poetry correctly the first few times I read it.
I like this, but I feel like my best critique would be given talking it out so I know what you did and why. There's something here but I'm having a hard time teasing it out, probably because I don't know your poetry style that well.
You know where to find me to talk about it.
~Rosey
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