Hello Alex!
I see you're new to the Society so first off, Welcome! I hope you're doing grand.
Second of all, I'm supposed to review this, so here we go: My initial thoughts were it was too short and needs a title. Also, I couldn't help but notice the capitalized 'I' in your statement "It's ugly It's cruel." You could have put a comma there and I see why you capitalized the 'I' but I didn't see it super necessary. Then, there was what I thought to be an awkward listing. You list all these tragedies 'The killings. The rape. The poverty...etc." and somewhere in all of this 'War' is thrown in. I don't know - it kind of threw me off.
But overall, I totally see your point and agree with you. Our world has become very pathetic...
Good luck to your career!
rosette
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