Hey there, I just wanted to leave a real quick review on this amazing piece of writing!
I really enjoyed your poem, especially because of the rhyming. Personally, I don't come across poems which rhyme in nearly every line very often, but it worked really well for your description which focuses on restlessness and repetitiveness. Your constant rhyme and rhythm helped convey the tone and made it pretty relatable to read.
The countdown of time structured your poem and showed a progression which eventually lead to an end point. On top of that, it may also resonate with your readers' own experience of desperately checking the time and making ourselves aware that it's running out when we're trying to fall asleep
Lastly, your ending was really strong and gave a sense of surrendering and helplessness, which is again very realistic. Good job on maintaining the relatability throughout!
Hope to read more from you soon~
Points: 65
Reviews: 6
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