Press your ear firmly against these waves,
and hear a miracle you fail to see on busy days.
This magnificent creation of man,
requires for opening neither hand!
'Tis automatic doors I speak of!
'Tis my Dearest Friend I speak of!
Thou art always polite as can be,
even when no one else does me see,
and give way, give way!
After a moment of quiet reflection,
gazing at your form that embodies perfection,
Through you I go, Through you I go!
Thus I leave behind this land of sorrow,
and enter a place where my heart no longer rings out hollow.
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Thank you for the reviews! To clear up the question both have had so far, the first line can be understood in at least two waves (heh, aren't I the punster?). The first interpretation is simply that it means sound, which after all is made of sound waves. That is , its meaning is "listen closely to what I have to say". The other, more "poetic" notion would be that this is a message carried to the reader by actual sea waves.
Press your ear firmly against these waves,#00FFFF ">I don't understand this line
and hear a miracle you fail to see on busy days.
This magnificent creation of man,#00FFFF ">I love these lines.
requires for opening neither hand!
'Tis automatic doors I speak of!
'Tis my Dearest Friend I speak of!
Thou art always polite as can be,
even when no one else does me see,#00FFFF ">a little bit awkwardly phrased, but thats okay
and give way, give way!
After a moment of quiet reflection,
gazing at your form that embodies perfection,
Through you I go, Through you I go!
Thus I leave behind this land of sorrow,
and enter a place where my heart no longer rings out hollow.
I love how you are taking something so everyday and really focusing on how amazing it is. I like the personification you use as well. Keep it up!
I really liked this poem. It was fun to read and amusing. The humour is a nice touch. If you had tried to be serious then you would have crashed and burned.
All in all a great, funny, clever poem. Keep writing.