Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression: Well...this is just one of those stories that make you go "Awww" and well that's it...its just such a cute and wholesome little story of two young children just having a fun day out in the lake.
Anyway let's get right to it,
One nice summer day I went to lake. "Are we there yet? Are we there yet?" "We are not there yet, Katya" said Mom.
Then we were finally there! "Hi Katya I really missed you so much." I said. "Me to" said Katia. There was snake close to lake said Katia.
Aww...well it seems like a pretty sweet little start there...well its got a little bit of confusion in the paragraphing that dialogue but considering how old you were when you wrote it, I think we can cut some slack here...xD...its just a really simple little concept here and it makes for a nice little opening paragraph here.
"Maybe it can't swim." I said. When me and Katia went into the water I learned how to do a underwater handstand. Then we rode the water morcilyee it could float. It went fast!
Then I wanted to make a sandcastle. So we needed rocks, water, sand, and some shovels and pails.
Ooooh...okay...these seem like a lovely series of memories from a trip the lake. This is definitely stirring up all that nostalgia and doing it very well, the pacing here is a bit on the fast side but again that's not a big issue considering when it was written...and well its just managing to put a constant smile on my face as I read and that is the best part of it.
Then I asked "Can we fly our kite". No later" said mom. "O.K." I said.
Then we had a little sand castle. Later on it was bigger but Katia had to stay in the tent.
Then it was lunch time. Everything was yummy. Then I said time to fly my kite.
Oooh...that does sound like an awesome day, building a sandcastle and then having food by the lake before going to fly a kite...ahhh this is just digging up far too much nostalgia for it to be healthy at this point...especially considering we're in a time where that's totally impossible at the moment.
I tried to make it fly but the kite couldn't fly. So I guessed that we sould do it at the park.
Then me and Katia prented to drink tea but we didn't. Then I dressed up. After that we saw the snake swim in the lake. I was so surpized! Then me and Katya collected seashells.
We put them in my brothers pockect. Then. I had to say bye! Bye! Katia I said. Bye said Katia. Then we left home.
Well, that seems like a perfectly lovely day out between two really good friends...and honestly that's it I suppose...but well..that's all you want too I guess...its definitely a really wholesome little short story this one.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall, this story managed to do the very important job of leaving me with a big smile on my face and that really is all you can ask from it
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As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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