i was writing it really quickly on microsoft word, and it had lots of 'u's in it cos i didnt want to forget what i wanted to write an then when i changed them i much have missed that one!
Here’s for all those times I wish I never gave a damn!
I wish I never cared
Because you’re not worth a second chance
You left me alone
You didn’t look back
So much for all the promises
As empty as they were pointless
I don’t want to be anyone else
Don’t try to change
Don’t try to rearrange me
Because it isn’t going to work
How can you ask me
To be the girl you want me to be
After everything you did
You think that things can be the same
You think you can turn back time
You’re wrong
You know it
So why can’t you see it?
You can’t say sorry now
Because it’s always too late for that
You can pretend that you don’t know me
You can think that I’m not there
Maybe someday you’ll see
Just what happened to me
And everything I cried over you
Behind these eyes
Is everything that you will never know
Or understand
Why can’t you accept?
That I’m walking away from u?
So someday Dad
When you’re all alone
And you remember me
And the family you lost
So long ago
And someday Dad
When I remember you
The Dad I lost so long ago
I’ll say a prayer or two
And hope you hear them
***if anyone can think of a better title let me know!!***
i was writing it really quickly on microsoft word, and it had lots of 'u's in it cos i didnt want to forget what i wanted to write an then when i changed them i much have missed that one!
"That I’m walking away from u?"
u? u? Argh! Hehe text speak in poems is one of my pet peeves, but it's nice to see it's the only one in the poem. A minor hiccup. Also
Why can’t you accept?
That I’m walking away from u?
is like putting a question mark in the middle of a sentence. And I thought the exclamation mark at the end of the first line wasn't necessary-the words speak for themselves. Apart from those little things, I liked it.
I think the title explains it all. I've got a similar kind of poem at home that I might put on here...except it may have to be edited a teeny bit because it goes on forever!
I always feel kind of bad analysing personal poems, you know? But all in all, I thought it was good, it's structured and it made sense to me.
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