First of all, This poem was magnificent. Not only did you talk about your feelings for this unknown girl but you demonstrate how wonderful it would be to have a guy devoted to them like you described in this poem. It's nice to think that out there in this world, there are still guys left just like you.
My favorite lines in this poem were when you said:
"If you ever need me, I'll be there in double-time.
If loving you's illegal, then I'm convicted of a crime."
Wow, those are some strong things to tell yourself. They are so meaningful and deep that I think anybody who reads it will be brought back to a memory or certain time in their life, whether good or bad. Being able to make the reader think back on events in their own life can be a challenging thing to do but in my opinion, it is what makes a great eriter.
Keep going on writing, you're doing great!
Points: 11
Reviews: 7
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