Young Writers Society

Hello AbduBinSaj8,
I have never read something like this before! Let’s see if I can do this justice.

This was an incredibly thought provoking work. It really wrestled with the idea that what we see on the internet isn’t always the truth. Sometimes to prevent us from buying into these “false truths” we need to really fact check and look at it from different perspectives. Even a second pair of eyes is helpful too.
As far as the story goes, it has a strong structure. At first I was worried that I would get confused about what was happening, but I was able to follow along perfectly well. Also the format really solidifies your….. “thesis” I guess you could call it?
I guess you could call this your thesis:

The current version of 'Truth' is too insecure and may leave your brain at risk. Update it for a better and more stable version.

Right from the get go I know the premise of the story. From there the reading is easy and brings forth a slew of interesting ideas that I think are really important.
Also this line made me laugh and get concerned at the same time.

Enjoy unrestricted, unlimited amount of fully authentic, unbaised truth with Truth inc.

It makes you go HMMMMMMMMMMMM. I guess we can’t even trust a lie detector any more can we?
So ya, I think you did a really good job overall!



I feel like you could’ve expanded a little bit more on this topic. Maybe by way of an error popping up or some such? I say this because there are a lot of different aspects to lies, truths and conspiracies on the internet. Such as believing everything you see, trusting random strangers on the internet too much and on and on and on. Other than that, I have no other ‘Buds’ for you.
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There are so many other aspects to this story that I didn’t even get to. Like how we sometimes rely to much on others to be our lie detectors. I could get more into that, but I don’t want to bore you. Anyways, I hope this review was helpful and if you have any questions feel free to ask. Keep on writing and have a great rest of your day.

Stellarjay