Hi, this is my first post. it's a rewrite version of "Ready for love" from Blackpink with "Love" name. I have also inspired a lot of the main lyrics. I have used some of the orginal lyrics' parts
Hope you like and enj
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[Love]
[Intro]
I want your love, your H-E-A-R-T
But you don't give me your heart
You flow my emotions like water
Like they're without any worth
[Verse 1]
Hurtin' me like l'm cheap
You may never find someone like me
No, hurtin' me is not right
Maybe you're the most wrong thing in my life
But you have things that no one has
Almost everything's not flawless in this world, you are white and black
Want you want you even with your goodnesses and badnesses
[Pre-chorus]
Maybe in first look you don't fall in love with me
But know you will like me
I wanna see
Your love, your my love, your love
So, let's meet each other beside love
[Chorus]
Let's be in love
Show my heart to you, would you show your heart, too?
A blink, l become less blue
Let's be in love
[Post-chorus]
Want you, want you, wanna be in love, wanna be in love
Wanna be in in love, wanna be in love, let's say and be in love
(yeah, love, love, love)
[Verse 2]
When l see you I take your hand
Wanna show you with each other's love our world will be less black
It's hard to prove you my love
I know, but again hope you be better, not the best with each other's love
Show me your love, l don't need a palace
Wanna just days to runnin' with each other, runnin', runnin'
I'm already fall in love with you, and will love you
So, l think may it's better not to throw me in a all up closed room
[Pre-chorus]
Maybe in first look you don't fall in love with me
But know you will like me
I wanna see
Your love, your love, your love
So, let's meet each other beside love
[Chorus]
Let's be in love
Show my heart to you, would you show your heart, too?
A blink, l become less blue
Let's be in love
[Post-chorus]
Want you, want you, wanna be in love, wanna be in love
Wanna be in in love, wanna be in love, let's say and be in love
(yeah, love, love, love)
[Bridge]
I don't know l'm right or not
Of course I know if you didn't want me, l'd be wrong
But l've never found like this attachment to you
But maybe l should look for someone else or leave you
I hope you love me exactly as much as l love you
[Outro]
Let's be in love
Hope love me from inside, love
So, my love, and your love
May you and l be in the same love
Also my mother tounge is not English and I get some help for the grammer from my brother. Please, comment your thoughts for me.
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Hey there! AkuRashomon is checking in for a comment/review. You also seem new here. If you need some advice, you can ask me or anyone with dark green and light green users. Now, to the review!
I want to know what the song sounds like. I have heard the song that is inspired by these lyrics, which is a K-pop song called Ready To Love by Blackpink. I tried reading it in that tone, but I could not seem to hear the melody of the song while reading the lyrics. I might be mistaken. Maybe this song has a different melody to the other song inspired and mentioned in your lyrics. It would be fun if you recorded yourself singing your own lyrics^^ I do love the fact you credit people that have inspired you to do this piece.
Meaning wise, this is good. The concept of portraying love this way is good. The song could be romantic, for a friendship or family. It is flexible when it comes to the meaning (love), but it can be portrayed as a lover, a friend, a family member, or someone you are close with and love. The grammar was quite good, by the way, yet I found the chorus kind of repetitive. But you can improve and you did a good job.
Thank you for sharing such a piece. This is AkuRashomon checking out of the review/comment.
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hey, here for a review.
in my opinion, it is a great piece that you have written and i am really happy that you have given the credits for your inspiration. many people ignore that but i am glad that you did not ignore it.
i really liked these lines, like its such a refreshing idea to compare emotions with flowing water and its getting wasted. because the other person thinks our emotions are worthless or they simply don't care and it's being wasted on them
this is so true about love. our heart only cares and loves that one person who is not right for us and even when we are aware of that fact,we still love them. you have explained it so beautifully.
i personally really LOVED these lines because the concept of having someone to help you bring light in your life is very common but i smiled when this line came up, to have less black/darkness in your life due to someone else is new and logical. all your problems does not get solved because of that one person but they actually help you to lighten up your life a bit gradually. now i feel like, i am overthinking about it. so, lets move on to other thing.
so, in conclusion its a great piece . and with practice i think its gonna be better.
so keep trying and practicing and i will try to become a better writer too. lets just hope for the best.
thanks~
Thank you