Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for language.
When they run,
the in old,
lovers of the crying man own
for if own the soon,
never mind you're jailed in prison my son by wrong.
west to east,
brighter burning fading say
though I REALISED to pray,
heaven is dead for none on risk
as to fix
dignity denies and racism born.
Then I VIEW it ,
it obeys the face it realizes next along todays and two days earning nice
war against themselves
best I can,
to better itself
resist,
lovely holy them and then
ending of story begins
EARLY HOPE
next to you
complete ! due to remains, few to you
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Hello there, one of King Koopa’s loyal henchmen, here!
I don’t usually write reviews for poems so I hope this comes out okay!
I love how the spacing and word choice of this poem takes me on a journey. Spacing, whether or not a word is capitalized, etc all seem to matter! There is a lot of text in here that implies dichotomy. Perhaps speaking about how silly it is that so many humans hate each other while we are all just the same on the inside. Just my interpretation! (•ᴗ<˶)✧₊ ⊹
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First of all, I love how short and simple this is, straight to the point yet not lacking in description. Great job on that! The vocabulary is very complex and the terminology and context used is quite mature and interesting.
The use of modern day problems was not something I expected to read honestly.
I particularly loved the line:
I honestly, don’t understand all of this, it seems like typos to me, that’s how ‘complex’ the terminology used is! I won’t deny that! I love this particular like because I like the way it’s worded and it’s quite deep and almost philosophical!
This line really struck deep because it can be interpreted in many ways and it’s the most relatable line I found! Overall, I’m so impressed( or maybe I’m just being overly clear that I have a long way to go at writing skills) and I hope you’re proud of yourself! Have a good day/night and thank you so much for reading!