These are the masses.
The downtrodden.
The taken from.
These are those who live in the slums.
The proletariat,
By the bourgeois scum,
They sit in their ivory towers, accumulating capital,
Unfazed by those beneath them, we, the proletariat.
We, the oppressed ones.
Fascists and populists,
From Trump to Farage,
Are seen by the masses,
As the saviours against the machine.
While liberal institutions continue to decline,
As wages dwindle and the economy stagnates,
The people demand change,
And they think it’ll come from so-called “anti-elitists”.
But are kept ignorant to their true nature,
The Swastikas behind the masks.
The burning crosses they secretly harbour.
The world is in danger,
Ruined by capital.
Liberals and Soc-dems,
So-called “enlightened centrists”,
Only plunge the world deeper into fascism.
Thus, we can observe,
Through the teachings of Marx, Engels, Lenin, and Stalin,
That a revolution of the masses is only fair.
The workers of the world unite,
Under the red banner of Marxism-Leninism.
Stood bravely in defiance against the one percent.
Against imperialism, against capitalism.
Party united under democratic centralism.
These are the masses.
The downtrodden.
The taken from.
These are those who live in the slums,
The proletariat
By the bourgeois scum.
They sit in their ivory towers, accumulating capital,
Unfazed by those beneath them, we, the proletariat.
We, the oppressed ones.
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Hello there!! I'm here to give you a review on this interesting poem of yours :)
First of all, I admire your bravery in writing and posting this! Art is one of the most important ways to protest and share your beliefs, so it's great that you've expressed yourself through poetry.
I will not be commenting on the beliefs behind the piece, because I believe that reviewing is meant for the craft, not necessarily the message. Instead, I'll give some advice to clean the poem up and make your message come across clearer!
One thing I love is your use of repetition--it does truly bring a power to your words. You also use some interesting imagery: "ivory towers" and "burning crosses" stood out to me.
Now, I do have some critique. I think you use a lot of specific terms here (Marxism-Leninism, Soc-Dem) and I don't think it's too helpful to your overall message. With poetry, sometimes it's not about coming out and saying exactly what you mean. It also makes the piece less understandable for people who aren't as familiar with political terms. In a way, this detracts from the point of the piece (which is to enlighten people to these strifes) because your intended audience may not have the vocabulary or understanding of politics to get your message.
I'd recommend making these terms more subtle--what do they mean? I'm sure there's a way to describe these political beliefs in other terms, digging deeper into their meaning. That way, you can create interest in the piece and make it more understandable.
Overall, I definitely enjoyed reading this! Keep writing!
<3, daisy
I think it is very important for people to continue to create art in this political climate, especially art that comments on what is going on. It seems I align with the majority of the political beliefs you share here in this poem.
What I like is the shortness of each line; this is a form of poetry that can be incredibly effective, especially when wanting to get a blunt point across.
Despite that, something I would like to see changed is to expand on certain things and have it be more focused. This poem seems to tell a very large picture. For example:
"Stood bravely in defiance against the one percent.
Against imperialism, against capitalism."
This is a great line and things that I go against as well; however, I would like to see it expanded on more. Why do we hate the one percent? Paint a picture of the why. I would like to see lines about people's stories and make it more personal.
Those were my little critiques. This is a great poem sharing modern issues. Have a great day!
slay (from a socdem)
Thank you so much!