HOMECOMING
Home is ever the north of my every direction
On a path that points to a blissful retrospection
Memories and moments that will forever true
Every wonder in this world cannot be in lieu
Coming home's like memory turning her longing gaze
On a place she once spent the solace of by-gone days
My heart that lays there, always and forever wistful
In a time frozen, everlasting and beautiful
Nevermore will reminisce that day I can roam
Gleefully! Now I can say, “I am finally home.”
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Hey there, here to review your poem!
Firstly I have to say I really enjoyed this poem. I liked the rhyming pattern - actually I liked the fact that you rhymed at all, not many poems seem to do that on this site - and you picked unusual words to make the rhymes work, like direction and retrospection and also roam and home which are almost like opposite words so that was cleverly done.
My only criticism is that maybe it could have been a little bit longer just so that the last line's 'finally' can be emphasised a little more but on the whole a good poem that was well put together and cleverly thought out.
Well done!
Hey 781228 Jonathan here for a review forgive me if it lacks awesomeness because I haven't done a review in forever.
Anyways you start of real well but you have no punctuation at the beginning which makes it sound weird (I have a lot of problems with it myself, but if you read this without stopping at all it really doesn't sound to good).
Otherwise this is really really great it is well worded maybe a little to well worded, and you don't need to say the title over again.
Best peace I have read in poetry so far.
Good luck.
~Jonathan~
I appreciate it. Thank you!
Hi! So I'm guessing you're from the Philippines, as well?
Well anyway, this poem was really well written, and I love the rhythm and rhyme! As I was reading, I noticed the lack of punctuation, but aside from that, I don't find anything wrong! This really is a great poem, and I truly enjoyed reading it. I hope to read more of your works in the future, but till then, keep writing!
Cheers,
GrapeNerd
Thank you so much! You're also from the Philippines? Mabuhay! hehe. I'll keep the punctuation errors in mind. Thank you again!