Rain

Hallo there! I'm here to give you a short review today.

This certainly was an interesting way to format a poem, though I can't really say I liked it. I found that it distracted me a lot from the actual content. Though, looking at it from a more thoughtful view, it looks as though you are mimicking the falling of rain by having (in most lines) just one word to a line.

The rhyme and repetition certainly make a nice effect on the poem. It gives it a nice, drumming and repeating flow. Though having "repeating fate" as one line (same with "watery state") breaks this flow. I believe you could have easily gotten away with keeping with the one word a line theme as with most of the poem.

Though, it should be noted that "keeps on" in the context of those last three lines works rather well. I actually must say that those last three lines make up my favourite part of this poem.

Overall, this is a nice, refreshing poem. I certainly like how the entire poem aims to create the image of rain. A decent job. So, as always, keep writing!
- noninjaspresent >(> ==)>

Hey Sparkle!

Well done, I enjoyed this poem. I liked how you formatted it to have that rhythmic, rainy effect. One thing did stand out,

Watery state

was this break in the pattern. The rest of the lines aren't capitalized, and this one is. Just make sure you decide whether you want to capitalize every line or not.

I would've also enjoyed something more than repeating verbs. This was a very visual, exciting poem. It was very easy to read. But at times, I felt like some depth was missing in the poem. The middle stretch really added to it. I would've liked to see more of that from the start. The conclusion was fine for me!

Nice job, Sparkles! I thoroughly enjoyed your poem. Keep up the good work, and keep writing!

Hi Its 3K here just dropping in. I see that you are trying to express a sort of sadness in this poem, and I think its pretty good. I do have a title suggestion that would give the reader a better sense of what you were talking a bout: Teardrops Falling From The Sky. I do like that and I hope you use it.Never give up you can only get better