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After Reading the Revelation

by 322sivart


The beat of the song, how I wanted it to be sung, and which syllables you put emphasis on might be confusing, so just post here if you want me to post the guitar chords that go with it.
-Alex

Tell me, who's the one you love?
Tell me now before I go to war
Just let me know for sure
Just tell me


Is my love enough?
Is my love enough for you
Or will you pick and choose?
Tell me


We only have so long before the time will come
So you just kiss me now and forget about what we'll become


Tell me, what you want me to do
Do you want me to go right now
And leave you here to drown?
Oh, Tell me


We are two in a few
Give me a quick kiss goodbye
And then I'll go and die
Tell me


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Sun Feb 13, 2011 12:14 am
lovethelifeulive wrote a review...



Hi!
Thank you for asking me to review your wonderful peice.
You have a very sweet and creative way of writing, witch I adore.
Here are some things I liked:

Tell me, who's the one you love?

Tell me now before I go to war

Just let me know for sure

Just tell me #FF0000 ">I really like the begining, it hooked me right from the start.



Is my love enough?

Is my love enough for you

Or will you pick and choose?

Tell me #FF0000 ">"Is my love enough-pick and choose" I like those two sentances a lot, very nice.



We only have so long before the time will come

So you just kiss me now and forget about what we'll become #FF0000 ">I like these two sentances even more. And I actually like how you seperated these into their own mini paragraph.



Tell me, what you want me to do

Do you want me to go right now

And leave you here to drown?

Oh, Tell me #FF0000 ">"leave you here to drown" I liked that a lot, too, definatly a keeper.



We are two in a few

Give me a quick kiss goodbye

And then I'll go and die

Tell me #BF0000 ">"Kiss me goodbye and the I'll go and die" awwww very sweet. I like the ending sososo much! It was a great ending to an amazing song. Bravo!



I think you did a great job. I really do hope to read more writing like this from you!
Thank you for posting it!
PS~ please don't be afraid to tell me when you have another one coming out, so that I could review it!




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Sat Feb 12, 2011 11:28 pm
FLyerS says...



Perhaps the chords should go with it. A lot of songs sound weird when you can't hear the music. Also, in songs try for more cleverness and wit. That's the difference between good lyrics and great lyrics.
Can't wait to hear more from you!





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