Don't Give Up On Yourself.

Hey, Day here to review.

I like the subject and the attitude here; we needy and insecure humans can never get enough of the inspirational, uplifting and motivating stuff. However, this wouldn't qualify as poetry seeing as it's more of a speech (or maybe the formatting got lost?), and some of the lines don't make sense to me, grammatically that is.

We all seek to reach something ??? We seek to be someone.
The second "we" doesn't need to be capitalized.

We urge to make our dreams a reality.
"urge" is not the right word to use in this context. You could replace the word with "strive" or, for a more emotional tone, "yearn".

We must be the best we can be. To become who we want to be.
This should be one sentence, with a comma separating the two.

It may be difficult, it may be complex.
"may" is the wrong word to use here; you should say "might". This sentence could be changed to "It will be difficult; it might even be complex."

You’re dedication & talent shouldn’t be put to rest.
It's "Your" not "You're". And try to avoid using the ampersand.

Rest if you must but don’t you quit.
This line needs a comma in between, and doesn't fit in with the rest of this passage; it's too lyrical. It also doesn't really connect with what you've said right before it.

Become who you wish – Don’t forget to thank me you dimwit.
There should be another comma right about......... ^ there.

On the whole, I like what you've tried to do here, but this needs some editing. Try focusing on punctuation, especially the pauses and placement of commas a little bit more, and formatting the write-up so it has more impact. Your thoughts are by no means bad, but they're rather disjointed and don't make for a smooth read. I also feel that this is much too short; you need to expand a little for this to have any real impact.

Additionally, this wouldn't qualify as poetry, not unless you change a good deal of things here. It would most likely come in the "Other" section.

Hope this helped.

Wow, this was great. I almost started crying. Probably because of the fact that I am way to over emotional.

I'm gonna give you a nice review, mainly because, I am very nice, and I can't really find any faults. So its also going to be short.


Here we go.

"We all seek to reach something – We seek to be someone."

This really pulled me in! The first few words are what get a person to continue reading. It's also very true. So I really liked it by this time already.

"Believe in yourself. Become who you wish – Don’t forget to thank me you dimwit."

I love how you're telling the reader to Believe in thereself. And I want to say, thank you.

You are a very talented writer, this peice was good, I enjoyed it very much. I really did love this.
Its just what I needed to read right now. Keep up the awesome writing!

~Winter

Great job. Very similar to a prose we a touch of repetition (don't, don't, don't...) the repetition gives it a touch of attitude. I would love to say these words to many students who give up too quick... Again, well done and like your poem states, keep writing!

I really enjoyed reading this. It made me think about what i want to be and what i once wanted. Your words spoke to me and made me realize that i want to find myself. I liked the part you said "We urge to make our dreams a reality. We must be the best we can be" because my best friend always says that to me.

This is beautiful. I love it.