Published May 10, 2009
Words,are there even any
nope
good enough
not many
smart
beutiful
no
a piece of art
still no words
not even close
to describing you
my mom
Happy Mothers Day
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Hey!
Ok. Even though i think that this was jsut a little something for fun and not a serious poem I am going to critique it anyways.
THe first line needs to be broken up if it is going to fit the style of the poem. It would have to look like this.
"Words
are there even any"
Then after that you kind of contradict yourself. you start by saying there aren't any words and then you say there aren't many. Try and find a way to reword it so you don't contradict yourself.
Other than that I think it was a sweet little poem. Good job and keep up the good work.