Published June 24, 2009
Thanks, But No Thanks
Sanding in the rain
Thinking something’s going change
I don’t where
I don’t how
I don’t why
I fly’s right bye
CHORUS
Running in the rain
Thinking something’s going change
I don’t know you
I don’t know me
But can’t you see
This is meant to be
You ask me a question
And have to say no
But I really what to go
Thanks, But No Thanks
I’ll be fine
Thanks, But No Thanks
I see the sign
Always thinking something else
Should‘ve known you were only for your self
Walk away in rain
Start to run
feel the pain
CHORUS
Don’t look back
Keep on running
Don’t attack
Keep on stunning
Your love
CHORUS X2
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I think it is good
but very repetitive some of the wording is also not quite there yet.
But it has potential to be amazing
but it's your chorus and first verse
Emily
Huh? 'Fly's'? 'I fly right by' I think might be better.
Rhyme/Rhythm:
It felt a little rhymey rhymey, but it wasn't that bad. None of the rhymes felt super forced to me, but some, (especially in the chorus) felt a little pushed. (If that makes sense
I thought the rhythm was really good. I could really hear the song in my head as I was going along so nice job with that!
Topic/Overall:
I don't have much to say here. I thought you presented the topic in a good fashion, it didn't feel super cliche to me and overall I thought you did a nice job
-Carly