Dreamscape is a fantasy book which i'm currently writing. An agent has showed interest in this and so, i thought i'd share it with you.
For twenty years, she neglected the thoughts that had taken over her subconscious mind. Letting the vigorous words squander until they were no more. It was only up until now in which she realised what she was doing. Why ignore the creative flow that is set to generate the mind? This simple thought galvanized her for many days and for many nights, an excursion in the hope of victory.
Then one afternoon when the blue moon could be seen from the lower tower of the east wing. For the first time in her long-winded life she picked out the quill, which laid forgotten at the back of the draw. She began to write the vivid notions down on dog-eared paper. Her mind floated; freely back into the dreamscape that she had starved for two decades. She did not know it, however while the ink ran thick the young enchantress became the wordsmith she once was. Binding the world together and turning it carefully into a once upon a time…
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Yes! Please add more soon! This is beautiful writing, and I can't wait for more!
I'll be checking back as often as I can
With such a small piece, it's hard to critic right away ^-^;;
Thanks for the lovely comments
I'm curenntly editing the whole thing. I should post some more up soon though
I love Rions art too Myth
I love mysterires! Write more please, I want to know who this person is, a sort of writer?

Oh, you have a Rion Vernon girl in your avatar. I love his work.
Like the talking tiger said, this was short but a very vivid, colourful opening.
I loved the opening lines about her mind, very poetic. Post more though, then people can give it a full crit.
Ooh, I like it so far. Not a lot to go on, but this seems well written. And tis great there's an agent who has shown interest in it
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