Published August 12, 2011
This poem is dedicated to the victims of the UK riots, those who are re-building their lives, and those who have lost loved ones.
There is beauty even in the midst of destruction
A beauty that transcends feelings of fear, anger, and confusion
And replaces them with feelings of hope, courage, and unity
A beauty that witnesses communities come together as one
Standing shoulder to shoulder
From all walks of life
All ages
And from a spectrum of many different races and religions
All working together for a single and solitary purpose
To show the very worst of society the example of the very best
To show that their homes may be broken and their lives forever scarred
But that the spirit of their communities can never be destroyed.
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Coco, I love the selection of the topic. And yes, I like the thought your portrayed here.
~Mia
Dear Author
Reading this poem was quite refreshing and lovely to read, considering the unfortunate events in England.
You made me see the spirit of unity and compassion within those lines, in which only a good poet could express.
Keep creating that poetry of yours!
From,
N.M.P McConnell
Hey coco!
Congrats on this beautiful poem! I really like the way you showed a story, the beauty through the sadness all in one poem. I don't have much to say other then good job and keep writing !
PM me or post on my wall if you have any questions!
- Boo
I like this because it tells a story and has a very vivid point! I liked the pictures defenitly a good touch. You have talent in poetry. Never give up you are very good, my only advice to you is to please right more! lol you rock!
This was a lovely poem considering the sad events in England. Thank you for writing this because it just somes up my views on today's society. I love the pictures too, they add that special emotional element to your poem.
The only problem I have is the fact that your poem is one LONG sentence. Wouldn't you like to seperate it with a few full stops? That's just a suggestion but you can leave it how it is because you may have done it purposely. I don't know, maybe to show unity or something. But I think it would make more sense if there were a few pauses.
Nice work! Keep writing!
I love the first line! And it goes so well with that picture you added!
Anyhows... now on to the poem, the content is great and you forward your message about the hope that can be gathered from even the greatest of disasters. Your entire poem is built on hope, or that's what I feel when I read it - there are sad and awful scenarios hidden in the text but your words are filled with hope, strength and love! LOVELY!
The lines were a bit too long followed by ones way shorter to keep the flow going but it wasn't too bad. I wouldn't mind if you added a little more punctuation than only a dot in the end and a few commas in the middle.
No grammatic errors were detected by me so... that only leaves this; YOU GET... 4/5 spiders!
Good Luck & Keep Writing
// Demoness