A letter...
A sonnet...
A ballad...
A novel...
An ode...
There is not a way to write
About our Love
Nor are specific words that clarify
The feeling of being in love with you
I could try to paint it,
But these hues lack the vividness
And brightness you bring
To my sublime reality
Sing...there are not highest
Nor deepest notes to expresses
The heights and shallows you take me.
You- you are...
We are... Indescribable.
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The first part was really what caught my attention most.
Especially This part
"There is not a way to write
About our Love
Nor are specific words that clarify"
That was quite nice to read.
Continue writing.. If you need anything else I'm always here C:
I don't really understand the title. Well, maybe it makes sense, I don't know...
This was a very pretty piece, I like the beginning the most.
It was really a lovely description.
Good job, I hope you continue writing such lovely things!
Howdy there!
I'm going to review this piece!
I agree with the others, this would make more sense as a poem. The layout here does not reflect what you're writing and isn't really visibly appealing which it could so easily be.
Firstly, this is really hard to break down. There is only one full stop at the end. I think the use of ellipses is good but perhaps it is used too much.
This makes no sense, I'm sorry. Why have you got a capital in the middle of a sentence? Why is the 'nor' even there?
But you paint a vivid picture, nice work
I agree with Wherethewindgoes said. It would be a lot better written as a poem
but you have good descriptive words:D very interesting to read too!
Salutations. Welcome to YWS!
I kind of like this, but I think it would be much better structured as a poem. Perhaps something like
Besides the formatting, I have a couple corrections or suggestions.
I think that's a way as two words.
I think that should be "Nor are there specific words".
I think that should be "the heights and shallows to which you take me".
Besides that, good job, and good luck with any future poems!
I know I can't write poetry I just write whatever makes sense to me but thanks for your advice
oh crap...this is so stupid but the website changed the format i had typed it in!!
I can't change the format on the website... I don't know why