Heya there DarkAngel_05, I really liked this!!
My review is most likely just gonna be a combination of all the other reviews you got.
I think this would do well as a song because the theme is super relevant and I think a lot of people would be belting this out at anybody that has betrayed them.
It had a really good rhythm to it but some bits seemed a tad long.(this could just be my imagination as I am not sure how this meant to be sung.)
I thought that you could have gone so much deeper and used a bit more expressive language in bits of it. It looks like you shortchanged yourself a bit with some phrases like
>I'll tell you to listen to my song and lock yourself in your den<
>may be cool and trendy<
>end up being kicked in your sleep<
Because of the rest of your song is so great, these lines seemed a bit clunky and lacked substance. It was almost like you rushed those bits and just stuck something angry in there when you could have used such simple and hard-hitting statements to get your point across.
Despite all these little fiddly bits I really loved this song!! SkyeJanexxx
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