Hi, I'm be reviewing your poem, i'm a fairly new member so i'll try my best to review as well as i can.
Firstly, this was a very well written poem which created great imagery and had an engaging tone to the reader, i like how you described everything throughout each verse. Your poem had a good rhythmic flow to it and it didn't really fall flat too much. There are a few small things i'd like to adress about your poem.
I think your opening sentence kind of had an awkward starting in my opinion, it started verging on more towards a short story rather than poetically. Maybe,
"A slit spell entered through my mind vent-like blinds." ?
I'm being picky here but you mentioned "it" about three times in your poem, for the second line you could have just written, "Presented in my room with the gift of melancholy."? just a suggestion. I like how you've used the word melancholy but it seems a bit heavy to use in comparison tot he rest of your poem theme. I also like how you've used the word "Drops" continuously, i'm not a fan of repetition but i think in this particular instance of this poem it goes well with the rest of your poem.
Overall great poem, keep writing! Hope i was of help to you,
Infinity x
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