Hi Mochi.
I am GeeLyria, in case that isn't obvious xD, and I am here to review for you.
First I would like to say that the thing I liked the most about your piece is the imagery because being honest, it made me curious and it craddles the fact that this is a free verse poem (you know, for the medieval haters, lol). I really appreciate correct punctuation, and the Title is pretty catchy. So, Thank you!
However, I'd suggest you to make this poem look a little bit more uniform by converting the stanzas into quatrains... Just cause quatrains are more attractive. ;] *ahem* I'll show you what I mean.
I'll fish for stars in the night sky;
And sit high along the rings of Saturn,
Hopping on the moons of Jupiter,
and catching a comet to the nearest galaxy.
See how much neater it looks? Or... I don't know, maybe I'm just in love - love is blind. Lol.
And I have just given you the silliest review I've done! Congrats! Lol, naaah. Feel free to PM me if you have any questions.
~GeeLyria
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