9 Ways To Look At Rain

Hi purplellamas!

I like the concept you have going here. I love rain, and there's so much you can do with it poetically (and so much you can do with it past the cliche sorts of things usually done with rain). I particularly like the 9th poem, and especially like it as the final poem in this set of nine. It's very summative, and direct, but still sort of beautiful in it's way. I also really like the first poem for many the same reasons!

There's not much I have to say structurally about these poems. I didn't have any grammatical issues that were glaring or disruptive, and this is quite free verse in the way there's no real rhyme scheme (but it still felt like it had a fine enough rhythm that I could read it without having to go back and adjust my internal reading voice).

However, I felt like a few of these poems were lacking in imagination. Like I said, there's so much you can do with rain! Yet many of these state facts, such as rain/water gives life (which is true, but there are so many amazing and poetical ways to say that other than "rain gives life"!). The goal of poetry isn't to tell us the things we know in the ways we already know it, but to show us what we know (or perhaps what we don't quite perceive) in a way we haven't accessed it before. Think about rain abstractly, in different perspectives, and show us some poems that paint it in different pictures but still give a strong meaning.

I really do like this piece, and I think with some tweaking it can be a lovely collection!

Keep writing!

-Lauren-