Hello Hello, I hope you don't mind me popping in a quick review. Now I fully understand that is very old and something you might not see. I will apologize if my comments come off as harsh it was not intended to be in any way. Also, I will try to keep this brief as this work likely doesn't reflect your ability today.
With that being said, the message does feel a bit half-baked, making the impact of these nice metaphors lessen. I feel if the author ever comes back to redo this a line should be added to hint towards what we will never understand. ( Right now it could be anything from love to adulthood.) Please don't think I am trying to bully you over old work. From what I gather you were young and we all have to start somewhere. However, I would love to see a more mature version of this writing style one day, as growth is fun to witness.
As always I hope you are doing well stranger keep writing and drink water! ( I hope my words do not offend you that is the last thing I would want.)
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