I guess this is a "serious" effort by me. I can't promise depth here or the concentration from other things of mine. I wrote it quickly, but carefully, in the library at my university when I should have been reading or preparing for midterms. When you review this, play around all you like. There is plenty here to dissect and fiddle with. I would love to have opinions on what you think the goal was or simply your opinion of the entire presentation.
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Bon appétit!
written 2/27/2011
re-posted 4/16/2011
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Bhahahaha! I love it! So short and to the point and yet it describes my feelings precisly at the moment! Again, Im am literally laughing. Not many writers are so bold! Opinions are febble and critical so be prepared!
-Eilin
If your going to write a poem, you might as well take care to write the poem. I thought it lacked volume, potential, any other language except French and English, life, awesomeness. You know, the works. Did you forget to write the poem? Seriously? Or was this just a bad experiment ( get my humor here)? So I'm just saying that whenever you post something here you my as well post the actual poem. Have I said that already? Okay that's really all i have, just take that into account for the next time you post.
-thestorygirl