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Unexpected: Prolouge

by AngelMarie


Unexpected

A normal happy life

Can turn to one of pain and sadness

When husband divorces wife

And you can’t control the madness.

Well things are now a bore

Until a simple routine checkup

Turns to something more

And your eyes start to tear up.

It was almost noon

This day was very much expected

But not this soon

But death is something you’ve accepted.

Then you know for sure

That you should always suspect

That life will knock at your door

And you’ll almost always face the unexpected.


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Sun Sep 26, 2021 5:00 pm
HarryHardy wrote a review...



Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

Anyway let's get right to it,

A normal happy life

Can turn to one of pain and sadness

When husband divorces wife

And you can’t control the madness.

Well things are now a bore

Until a simple routine checkup

Turns to something more

And your eyes start to tear up.

It was almost noon

This day was very much expected

But not this soon

But death is something you’ve accepted.

Then you know for sure

That you should always suspect

That life will knock at your door

And you’ll almost always face the unexpected.


Okayy...so if I'm not mistaken, this prologue here is mean to be in the form of a poem of sorts, cause the formatting being used here and the general feel of this piece is giving me very poemy vibes at the moment, and while it does seem like a sort of narrative poem, it is very much a poem.

This does bring an entirely new flavor to the story here, definitely something rather unique here...and you manage to explain yourself rather well through this medium here, it manages to very effectively bring to life the general gist of this incident and well, this is certainly the sort of incident that is very effective at catching your attention here.

From what I understand it looks to be a case where someone finds out their significant other has some kind of terminal illness during a routine visit to the doctor which predictably leaves them in tears and the death comes even sooner that was expected...which well, certainly succeeds in making me want to read more of this story...so yeah, a very unique and I'd also a very effective prologue here. :D

Aaaaand that's it for this one.

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.

Stay Safe
Harry




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Sun May 01, 2011 7:48 pm
stargazer9927 says...



I love the fact that you added a poem to explain your story. That's very creative! I don't think I've ever seen anyone do that before. But then when I think about it: why not?




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Wed Dec 22, 2010 6:55 pm
AngelMarie says...



Thank you!!! :D i will have the first chapter up as soon as i get enough points lol :D :D




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Wed Dec 22, 2010 12:04 pm
easilyinspired says...



#8000BF ">Hey, I really like this!!! It hints at what could happen, and it really makes me want to read on. Keep writing!!!





A woman knows the face of the man she loves as a sailor knows the open sea.
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