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“How do I always get pulled into these situations?” I could help but think “I try to do something good for once and it ends up backfiring in my face”.
I sat back in the my chair and sighed. The cold steel of the handcuffs, was a constant reminder that I was someone’s prisoner. Someone who I had yet to meet. Someone whose sense of style (if you don’t mind me saying) way out of whack.
Sure the chair that I was sitting in and the table in front of me were nice. But the room itself, was in desperate need of a splash of color. Scratch that, the room needed a complete makeover. Anything to block out the blinding white paint, that coated the walls and ceiling.
I looked around the room once more, and couldn’t help but think of the events, that got me into this predicament in the first place. Those events seemed to pale in comparison to everything that was happening right now. It all stated with a little prank...
Hmm...well going through this, it doesn't quite make for a prologue here. This honestly sounds like it would be a much better fit for the start of a first chapter with the kind of tone we have here and the ending, which while working as a cliffhanger, honestly sounds like a bit of a segway into an explanation there...and not quite like an ending.
That aside though, we've got a pretty strong piece here. The description of the situation is quite nice, its short, but it manages to bring across the gravity of the situation nicely and show that things aren't so well for the person involved although you also don't get much of a sense of mortal danger. There's a light touch of humor across the whole thing and I get the sense that while this person is worried, they're not necessarily in that much of a predicament or at least they're fairly confident of being able to escape when they need to.
The voice of the main character here is also quite likeable which is great cause in first person that is rather essential since they will be essentially narrating the story to us...so uhh, off to a really nice little start here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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