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The mysterious figers creeped closer. The shadow commanding them slowed them to a halt.
“You might as well come out, I know your there,” the voice seemed to come out of the fire it's self. The figers stopped, and whirily approached the Fire Goddess. That's what they called the beautiful women sitting in the coles of the dieing fire.
“Come closer, that's right. Now, I know you want to attack your nabors, and Relta is in your way. I'll show you how to defite it, but I must get something in return. I want Relta. You Monetans are the true warriors, not those Reltins. Yet they still stand in your way. Give me Relta, and I'll show you how to bet it,” the voice was intoxicating.
A rough voice answered hers, “Well do that as long as you tell us your name, goddess.”
“My name? Well then, you shall. My name is Larween.”
Hmm, this is an interesting piece here. Despite being as short as it is, I feel like it manages to bring across a sufficiently mysterious and interesting scene to the reader that also happens to feel complete and that's quite nice to see. Its also something that appears to work as a prologue, while it might also be better served as a first chapter especially if you plan to continue with these same characters in the chapters to come. Its a bit harder to judge this one cause we don't know what the first chapter looks like but that's something to keep in mind.
You manage to build a good amount of tension and mystery in this character with the figures creeping up and the general assassin nature of how things are going here. I think it manages to pull the reader in fairly well here and keeps our attention for the duration of the piece. There are hints at some pretty nice worldbuilding having been done in the background too...so that always is a nice bonus here.
Overall, an effective prologue despite how small it is and the spelling issues aren't too bad...nothing that a little autocorrect can't fix for ya
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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