Oh, well excuse me, Firestarter 
I'm from Ohio, so I'm sorry for my Ohio-an critique
-Amice-
Oh, well excuse me, Firestarter
I'm from Ohio, so I'm sorry for my Ohio-an critique
-Amice-
Fireworks... makes me think of July 4th, not "December eve".
Great poem! Just a couple notes...
In the first stanza, you went from present tense to past tense, and in the second stanza, back to present. 
"metacarpals"? 
I think that drops the romantic theme of the rest of the poem.
With death so eerily close I shut my senses
Wow...how romantic. It had a really nice flow and gave you a real appreciation for the Winter Season. I enjoyed the first stanza the most.
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Weird.... I'd have to say that it was all pretty darn good (and the beginning was *excellent*) except that the last two lines sounded way cliche to me...
Eh, no accounting for taste.
"perhaps a million strangers, all living and breathing. I can't tell them "
Take out perhaps. It sounds wishy washy, and it doesn't fit in with the tone.
"With death so eerily close I shut my senses. "
This line seemed unnecessary. It's restated what you already pretty much said, and it makes it less profound by being so direct.
"In the last few seconds before a winter sunset dies
there is warmth inside and coldness out; my "
Awesome part number one.
"I can't tell them
I am little more than a ghost, because they are little more than a blur. "
Awesome part number two.
Great poem. You got a lot in here that is really good (such as the two sections I pointed out), and it reads really well. Thought it was great.
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