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Cool Memories I

by Ieatworms


This was one of your more accessible poems. I liked it.

One point of concern:

"Her taste lingers like languid language leaves the reader speechless."

I think a word or comma is missing here.

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Thu Dec 01, 2005 3:38 am
PsyLynx says...



I really like it a lot. Good job.





When your heart gets pierced with arrows, don't rip them out and pierce those around you in retribution for your hurt. You'll only unnecessarily wound others and bleed to death yourself.
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