Realistic Fiction

Hi Nikki!

RandomTalks here with a short review!

This seemed more like an introduction to a story or maybe the introduction of a character in the story. I am not really sure what to view this as because this is mostly just an outline of what the person our protagonist claims to be. There really isn't any plot in this story or any other element that actually makes it a 'story'. It sounds more like a declaration by the character who is exhausted by the stereotypes and the generalization that people immediately force upon her on learning her status.

I guess the main theme of the story is the struggle to find an identity for oneself. People hear that you are the son or the daughter of this person and they immediately create an outline of the person you are supposed to be. More than often these assumptions weigh a person down as they feel shadowed by the stereotypes and the ideas of other people. I think this is the case with our protagonist.

In every sentence, she tries to draw a contradiction between who she is and who people assume her to be just because she is a princess. She is rather firm and confident in her declarations and we can tell that she is tired of trying to establish her own identity and being rejected by society every time.

However, I think you can better establish that with the help of some instance or interaction where she was trying to be herself but was cast aside by the general assumptions of people. You have probably heard of the expression, 'show, don't tell'. That is exactly what you need to do here. You have told us who the main character is. But now you need to show us who she is through your narration because otherwise we have no reason to believe.

Overall, I thought this was a good attempt and I can feel that you have a really developed writing style. However, you need some plot to tie this together into a story. Otherwise, it is just a character introducing herself in the beginning of a story that is missing.

Keep writing and have a great day!

thank you! I'm really new to this and have very bad typing skills. So any help is appreciated. P.S. I wrote something in non-fic called A guide to snow shoveling that you guys can check out if you want....
*hint* *hint*

Hello! I like this... But its kinda hmm... Overused I guess cliched.
Instead of making a whole bunch of posts for one story just click on the edit button at the top of the screen and you will be able to put it all in your first post.
You need to review your work before posting it you have allot of spelling and grammar errors.
Keep going I would like to see where this story takes you.
PM me once you have written more.

_Good Luck!
Genevieve
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Hey Nikki!
Before I start the review, I need to tell you this:
You should put all your bits in one post. Just click 'Edit'. :}

I'm pretty sure there isn't a real name fro this type of writing so I made it up myself.

Anyways, if you write these kinds of stories or love reading it then come here. I'll post some of my stories shortly

I live in a big old castle and have a kind and queen for a mother and father and all that..but I don't exactly put myself in that category.

I spend most of my time riding horses and practicing my mage skills instead of planning outfits and staring at boys.

and for the record, I'm 12. I was stupid enough to let my mom make this account and she actually put that I was 14. I ahve no idea why.