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Anyway let's get right to it,
He entered the abandoned building, hoping that he would actually die this time. But unfortunately, Fate was never with your side if you rebel against your God and pissed him off. Honestly, why did Grigori-Thirty even thinking of doing that? Whatever the reason was, whatever the emotion that had driven him to rebel, Grigori-Thirty really had not regretted it.
Well, things are immediately off to a powerful start there. This is definitely one of those starts that makes you sit up and take notice quite quickly because it appears that we've got someone that's genuinely wishing for their death after having rebelled against their god, which sounds like a pretty big deal but also for some reason this happens to something this person doesn't regret despite knowing all of these consequences. This is the sort of start that gets you as a reader asking a lot of questions which and that makes for an awesome start.
But the Queen of Frochnji was being quite the whore, being oblivious of the situation Grigori-Thirty was in. At this point, Grigori-Thirty was persuaded that the Queen of Frochnji was the punishment Kutya-Kyon had given him for rebellion. Sadly, rebellions towards gods were fairy tales, and they seemed to never come real. Now kicked out from the Paradise of Death, where he was one of the respected Guardians of Kutya-Kyon, even bathing himself with the Dregs of the Altar of Mercy. He was even respected, given to Kutya-Kyon 10 silver plumes, each feather carved with an animated eyeball, staring all over, being the ubiquitous Harbinger of Justice.
Okay, not entirely sure where that particular paragraph is going even after reading through it a couple of times. The general gist seems to be that this person was exiled from his land for his rebellion and saddled with someone he doesn't like. The last part seems to talk about the respect that he had back in his own land, but it really its clear if that's referring to Grigori or this Kutya person.
But of course, all these events were dreams. Grigori-Thirty was busy making his pilgrimage to Cocytus, where he would truly die. But the she-dog, the Queen of Frochnji, and several other insults Grigori-Thirty could’ve sputtered out refused his entrance, the permission to travel to the Land of Tears, where he could go to Cocytus.
But if the building collapsed upon Grigori-Thirty, he would’ve loved it. He wouldn’t suffer anymore, and there would be none of the annoying existence of life.
All he wanted was to fade away, to succumb to the Filth.
Okay, so this seems to continue with the thing that started the first paragraph, where this one wants to go somewhere in order to die but the Queen doesn't give him permission and so that angers this one quite and now he's waiting do fade away in whatever location he's stuck in at the moment. I will admit by this point, I don't fully understand exactly what's been going on, the only thing that's very clear is that this person did something against their leader and ended up exiled and now wishes to die.
Anyway, yeah I don't really have much else to say beyond that. It was an intriguing piece to read, but especially that middle paragraph really isn't particularly clear at least to me.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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