Time is precious,I am but a wilted flowerdarkness is my only companionas I clasp my hands and prayI weep for your voiceI am only your feelings.the taste of evil
Short yet still very poignant.I am picking up the theme of falling from grace."I am but a wilted flower" something that was beautiful that has now died."Time is precious," A setup to the next line affirming the worldview of this narrator."darkness is my only companion as I clasp my hands and pray" This line implies that the narrator sees themself as alone or hated by what though? God, Man, Self?I interpret the narrator as being similar to Lucifer from Paradise Lost, since they seem to have the same worldview."I weep for your voice I am only a feeling." This line sold me on the idea that this is Lucifer because this verse dose not express empathy but rather pity. And even a brief indication of a condescending true nature."the taste of evil" okay, compared to the spiritual sadness the rest of the poem radiates, this part is kinda just okay.But overall I really liked this it very much reminded me of Paradise Lost by John Milton.Keep up the good work.
Hi ! Anne here for a review!!I have to admit, your title was so attractive. It promised a great poem and also kept that promise.I loved this short and sweet poem. The expressions used were amazing.'Wilted flower' is such a beautiful expression to use when talking about any incident in life. It reminds us that misery usually follows happiness. And after blooming, a flower wilts too. And it was even more amazing used in the poem, since it seemed to mourn for loss of someone special. Then follows, 'darkness is my only companion'- another great one. I do hope you have a fight with that companion though, so that you're able to befriend it's enemy- light.
as I clasp my hands and prayI weep for your voice
I was scrolling through the Green Room and your title immediately caught my attention.
Hello there BrokenHeartsAri!Looking at the title, it caught my interest. The idea of describing evil from the way it tastes is exciting because the first thing I thought of was food. That isn't the case with this, but it's still a funny connection I think. Of course, I believe you were describing how some people use the term taste with people who have had karma come back for them because of their bad deeds, or even vengeance being described in that kind of way. Now, into the actual contents of the poem~
Time is precious,
darkness is my only companionas I clasp my hands and prayI weep for your voice
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