Young Writers Society

hmm, im going to be blunt with you, okay? i think the best way to write a review is to not sugar it up and actually try to help the person, and say more than " good job it was wonderful"

i have to admit, ive never been a fan of long poems, but this one is a bit short for my taste. im just trying to pass the time and earn points, but this one was too quick for me to actually enjoy it.
nothing rhymes. i dont like poems that dont rhyme. its been a pet peeve of mine for a few years.
i like the words you chose, dark and passionate. you got to the point easily and didnt hesitate to put your emotions out there.
the title was a good choice as well, it reeled me in under the " related items" column. the poem itself wasnt very confusing, and i understand how you felt. i can also relate to you, how you feel.
overall, it was good.
bye! i believe in you! your doing great!

hey ari i im here to give you a quick review i hope you enjoy this review

so lets get started with your poem ari

First ari what made wanna come up with such a nice good poem ari i im glad ari that you make some inspiring poems ari and ari i love the way when you and gem collab together ari and i wanna know and is y'all next collab together ari and just now some of the poems i like is when you make them about roses and thats when i im like ari is so much good at her poetry and ari keep up the good work

My compliment is ari when did you start doing poems anyway how did you start getting good at them i be seeing people be saying that you such good at poetry and is true you are through ari and i im glad we got so much poetry people in the world now

How you can improve is ari keep doing your best and keep up the good work ari and hopefully i see new more work from you ari and i im glad that i had the chance to read a such lovely poem ari

Keep writing ari and have a nice day!!

-jay

Short yet still very poignant.
I am picking up the theme of falling from grace.
"I am but a wilted flower" something that was beautiful that has now died.
"Time is precious," A setup to the next line affirming the worldview of this narrator.

"darkness is my only companion as I clasp my hands and pray" This line implies that the narrator sees themself as alone or hated by what though? God, Man, Self?

I interpret the narrator as being similar to Lucifer from Paradise Lost, since they seem to have the same worldview.

"I weep for your voice I am only a feeling." This line sold me on the idea that this is Lucifer because this verse dose not express empathy but rather pity. And even a brief indication of a condescending true nature.

"the taste of evil" okay, compared to the spiritual sadness the rest of the poem radiates, this part is kinda just okay.

But overall I really liked this it very much reminded me of Paradise Lost by John Milton.
Keep up the good work.

Hi ! Anne here for a review!!

I have to admit, your title was so attractive. It promised a great poem and also kept that promise.

I loved this short and sweet poem. The expressions used were amazing.
'Wilted flower' is such a beautiful expression to use when talking about any incident in life. It reminds us that misery usually follows happiness. And after blooming, a flower wilts too. And it was even more amazing used in the poem, since it seemed to mourn for loss of someone special. Then follows, 'darkness is my only companion'- another great one. I do hope you have a fight with that companion though, so that you're able to befriend it's enemy- light.

as I clasp my hands and pray
I weep for your voice

I was scrolling through the Green Room and your title immediately caught my attention.

Time is precious,
I am but a wilted flower
darkness is my only companion
as I clasp my hands and pray
I weep for your voice

I am only your feelings.
the taste of evil

Hello there BrokenHeartsAri!

Looking at the title, it caught my interest. The idea of describing evil from the way it tastes is exciting because the first thing I thought of was food. That isn't the case with this, but it's still a funny connection I think. Of course, I believe you were describing how some people use the term taste with people who have had karma come back for them because of their bad deeds, or even vengeance being described in that kind of way.

Now, into the actual contents of the poem~

Time is precious,

darkness is my only companion
as I clasp my hands and pray
I weep for your voice