Hi Charlie! Hope you're having a fantastic day or night, I'm here for a review!
This is so adorable - it made me genuinely smile to read. I can tell exactly what image you wrote it with in mind, and it's such a sweet one. There's so much genuine emotion in this poem, and it's so sweet that I can feel the emotions that you write with.
I love the imagery of "crows on a telephone wire"! I am a sucker for extended metaphors, and I love that you continue the image of crows throughout the poem. It's such a cute way to imagine it, two strangers. I'm wondering if you could incorporate that image into the second stanza, or maybe into the title? However, the title is beautiful and the second stanza is a nice break back into reality to remind us that we are talking about humans, so my suggestion is totally optional.
I Love the images in this and the imagery is just beautiful. Fantastic job!
Points: 23
Reviews: 12
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