Hello, this poem was a very beautiful one especially because it's about a father describinghis infant daughter. I think there was a lot of emotion in this poem, and i liked how you made the poem rhyme. My favourite lines were
"i saw your little eyes
for the first time -
they were closed.
and your fists were clenched
in small, tight balls.
your toes were curled.
and when you opened your eyes -
those little brown orbs -
made me want to melt."
I especially likes the line where you said her eyes made you want to melt, because it shows the unconditional, pure love between parent and child.
I liked how in the second stanza you taljked about the daughter now all grown up and about how much you cherish her.
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