I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem. It makes me think of when I'm driving down a country road at night. You also, showed very good visuals in the descriptions. Keep up the good work.
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Rubber on asphalt thrums while insects hum,
swirl and hurl themselves against the windshield
in some macabre urge to die.
Road-kill every five miles or so.
Raccoons, rats, ravens and an occasional deer.
A darkening sky above a light-domed city.
The somber, brooding foliage fringes my road
without expected pity.
I wish I had you here.
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem. It makes me think of when I'm driving down a country road at night. You also, showed very good visuals in the descriptions. Keep up the good work.
Hello, Radrook! Let's dive into the review!
From the start I could tell right away that you knew what you were writing about -- you definitely planned this well (but not too much). Your use of imagery and words really came to your advantage. I admire your well thought out work!
in some macabre urge to die.
The somber, brooding foliage fringes my road
Raccoons, rats, ravens and an occasional deer.
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This poem really hit me hard, good job (it takes a bit for me to get like that). I could really see your scene even though your poem was short. You had good word choice with some good vocabulary (makes my brain happy). I know the feeling of being lonely and you display it in a way that isn't exactly saying you are lonely but we can tell that you are in a subtle way. Good job. I personally don't think you need to change this in any way, I think it is perfect.
Points: 27
Reviews: 24
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