Young Writers Society

I like how raw the release of emotion is here. You don't waste time "fluffing up" the substance of what you're expressing, which allows it to be clear and impactful. Although this is a good thing in some respects, it also narrows down what you already have, making this less like poetry and more like a diary entry that rhymes. Maybe put in some figurative language and symbolism to give it a bit more imagery for the reader. I really like how you didn't go with the typical ABAB rhyme scheme I thought it would be, there's way too much of that in poetry from what I've seen; your rhyming is enough to help the piece flow without making it sound too showy, and I like that it adds to the effect without distracting from the purpose.

I love this. It feels resonant to me, although I'm not yet in the stage where I can let things go. This poem flows rather smoothly, although some spots could go better.
Example:
Things are much different from then till now,

"No longer am I sad, small and insecure.

I have new eyes, a new brain, though two left feet,

My upgrades have left little to obscure."

Not sure what it is about this part, I just don't think it flows entirely well. It helps to read your poems out loud after you're done to make sure it is entirely rhythmic. Al in all, I think this is a good poem, with a strong meaning that a lot of people can identify with.

Ps~ I am by no means a professional poet ^^"
Joelsweet