Hey, Artemis28. I stumbled on this poem, I'm lingering because it reminds me of The Great Gatsby. The idea of wealth and a show to steal a girl's heart fits perfectly.
Out of curiosity, have you read The Great Gatsby? It doesn't matter really, but I'm wondering whether this is a coincidence.
I loved the premise, and don't really have any other suggestions for changes. I'm not a poetry person, you see...
Keep Writing!
~Bella~
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