I like how the title has nothing yet everything to do with this.
It intrigues me why, of all free-flying birds, you choose the pigeon. It does make the audience wonder, but maybe we're not wondering the right things because of that.
An edit I would make is to change "be" to "fly", just to tie in the analogy of life to the bird.
Although I love the simplicity of this, I feel it's almost less of a poem and more of...a quote. Being so short, think of how many people in this universe may have put together this exact strand of eleven words. It's hard to make a piece your own when it's this short.
However, it's not all the words, but the person behind them. The feeling. And as long as that is original and all you, I don't think there's problem with a two-line poem. To add on excessively would be to take away its simplicity, and that's what makes it unique in the first place.
This probably didn't say much but...hope it helped or encouraged you anyway.
Keep writing.
Yours,
~iron.n
I revise not as a judge, but as a fellow writer eligible for judgment on the same level.
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