WOWIE
So, the bed part about this poem is the rhyme scheme. The words flow so well because of it, not to mention your choice of words, which helps the poem right along. Now, I want to read whatever horror manga you were reading.
My favorite lines in the poem are
"I know she's dead
I know she's gone
And it's just the beginning
She's just a pawn" but what's important to remember is that even though it's a poem, it still needs punctuation. You used periods but you still need commas.
Like maybe this,
"I know she's dead,
I know she's gone,
And it's just the beginning,
She's just a pawn"
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