Young Writers Society

I am extremely grateful that you have actually included a link to where you sing the song - whenever I write a review for lyrics, I lament (that is an intentional pun on the fact that I am reviewing lyrics, yes) the fact that there is no indication (not even an attempt at one) of what the dynamics, tempo and rhythm, to name a few, should be.

And I must say, actually hearing the music makes a world of difference to one's perspective of the lyrics. For example, though your singing was not too fast, it was nevertheless faster than I would have expected. Not in a bad way though - heavens no! Not everything rhymed, but it is not necessary for it to rhyme in the first place. Also, your voice reminds me of Lily Allen - that means I like it, by the way

Another thing that made your song great was the excellent instrumentation. I especially enjoyed the guitar accompaniment - did you play that yourself, or was someone else playing it? Either way, the vocals, guitar and drums went together nicely.

There was a slight point of confusion though, for when you sang the fourth line of the first verse, you added an and which is not in the lyrics; however, it is nothing really important, but simply a minor inconsistency.

I enjoyed the melody, but the instrumental (as indicated, and not throughout the song) was merely adequate. And the end of your song also came upon the listener quite suddenly; I had expected a ritardando.

The few negative points I have indicated are minor in comparison with the rest of your song, as it does influence the overall impression of the whole work, but not by too much. Would you be as kind as to inform me upon your latest recording's release as soon as you have uploaded it? I quite enjoyed this song, and I'd be very interested to discover what changes you will have made to it.