Hello! KatyaElefant here for her last review of the day! I'm too busy for life so I'm going to stop here! Oh and Happy Review Day! Let's see what you and your sister have come up with...
Just some minor stuff that can be easily fixed! So the first poem, I feel should be broken up into two stanzas. That would sure help that part! You could always use more punctuation in a poem. I feel like if you put it in here, then you will make the poem flow much more better. That's all I have to say that you could or should change. Not that much!
I love how these two poems contrast each other. It's nighttime and then it's morning. I love how you chose that. They are both so sweet poems.(makes me want to nom on them) *noms on poems* The lines are so pretty in both of them. The spelling and grammar is amazing. If your sister is in fifth grade or younger, then she is doing much better in writing than I did when I was a younging like her! Your organization of phrases is great. They flow right in to one another. Great job with all of this! Your sister should be proud of herself! I was never able to make such amazing poems when I was younger. *I probably still can't do this now* Have a nice review day! Keep calm and keep writing!
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