Hi there! Hadj trying to get over his fear of reviewing!
First things first, welcome to YWS! If you have any questions, let me know!
Now, on to business...
Nitpicks
1) In stanza 3, change "Six foot tall, height speaks loud" to "Six feet tall, height speaks loud", the plural of foot is feet
Criticism
I was confused by the rhyming in this poem. I wish that you would have left out rhymes altogether, or created a consistent rhyme scheme.
Although this poem is beautiful, it lacks poetic devices, and reads more like an essay. I would suggest adding some devices to make it flow better as a poem (rhyme scheme, rhythm, similes, metaphors, personification etc). However, if you prefer it the way it is, that's fine too, whichever way you think best displays your thoughts.
Praise
Awesome poem!
I love how its broken down, the beginning brings emotion and sadness, the middle teaches three important lessons, and the end evokes happiness and content.
This poem is interesting, unique, and full of useful lessons.
Great work, welcome to YWS, and keep on writing!
Hadj
Points: 517
Reviews: 78
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