Young Writers Society

Alright, alright. I've got mixed views about this one.

Firstly, the sentence " Meet your expectations and higher them", is not right. It should be " keep high expectations", or something else.

Secondly, you need to punctuate this article properly. It really gives a bad impression when the letters supposed to be capital aren't capital, and the commas are not present, and other stuff. Please edit it.

Thirdly, the way you've written " Don't keep too high expectations, it'll hurt you in the end" sounds like something out of a TV show. Don't take offence; I'm just saying that when you write articles like this, you have to back up your given points LOGICALLY and with PROOF. Otherwise no one takes you seriously.

Don't be disheartened! Keep trying. Keep it up!

Mysticalxx

Hey there! Scarlet here, as you know It's review day.

You know what that means, time to review!

Nitpicks first...

- I don't like how it's in a big chunk, I have said this to many people before. It needs to be broken into paragraphs to make it more accurate and easier to read.

Life gives you a chance to change the way you've lived , to change the the agony in your soul and turn in into something I believe that is beautiful !

When you have that chance , don't be so surprised with how happy it can make you because everything has its disadvantages , bear in mind that you're still going to experience some pain but it's now or never , it's today not tomorrow !

but I discovered that i'm only going to get hurt this way

Hello, Chips here with a review.

I liked the positive encouragement that this essay was all about and the message it was trying to convey.

I thought the way you've formatted the essay would be even better if it were split up into paragraphs, which makes it easier to differentiate the introduction, middle/main body and conclusion. I'm not sure if it was meant to be written formal or informal, but most essays are written formally anyways.

"Life gives you a chance to change the way you've lived , to change the the agony in your soul and turn in into something I believe that is beautiful !"

Just a nitpick but you could put the comma closer to the word, because it looks misplaced when put in the center like this, same with the exclamation mark. I thought this line was a little long for the opening also, the punctuation and grammar in general could be improved upon. There should be a full-stop after the word, "lived", so everything after it should be a new line. Organization makes it simpler to read too.

As an overview: This seemed more like a speech as oppose to an essay, which isn't necessarily a negative thing. I thought this essay was quite subjective as you gave no examples or other viewpoints which would have been good to see.

Overall good job, keep writing! Hope this review helped.

--Chippy

Hi.

So this another one of those inspirational speeches. I like these.
This paragraph is about change.

Life gives you a chance to change the way you've lived

When you have that chance , don't be so surprised with how happy it can make you because everything has its disadvantages , bear in mind that you're still going to experience some pain but it's now or never , it's today not tomorrow !

Meet your expectations and higher them ! That's the only way you'll never be disappointed !

Welcome to kholoudZayat. I hope you enjoy and learn a lot here.

Well, whatever you have said is true and reflects the reality here.

There is a bit of issue with the format of your writing though. You should have broken your article into two to three mini paragraphs for the readers to read easily. And also, the usage of commas are so much dude; I suggest using other punctuation too.

Apart from that, including a personal or any story regarding you essay/article, makes it quite interesting too.

Well it is just a beginning. So don't worry and keep writing.

All the best.

Cheers